You said the words i needed to hear
You made me feel what i wanted to feel
Yet you were not there when i looked around
You were gone, not to be found
Now i know it was simple yet genuine counterfeit.
I went to sleep with my head on your chest
I woke up with your arms around me
Now i am alone on my bed
Why were you there in the first place
If you had to leave
Now i know it was plain yet genuine counterfeit.
I liked smiling with the thought of you
Smelling of you when you were not around
Now just the memories remain
Of what was not there even when it existed
Now i know it was effortless yet genuine counterfeit.
I remember you looking into my eyes
And with yours making a million promises
The silent prayers and the dreams shown
Shattered into pieces still being unspoken
I cried then not knowing what
Now i know to be pure and genuine counterfeit.
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excellent!
'so many words for the broken heart...'i always borrow songs while writing comments for u...coz they r so lyrical... make them into songs and i'd be the first person to have them on my player :)...really good
wow...
beautiful flair...but the oxymoron u're using,i guess,needs better use for a better significance/implication...even with the objective of sending out hidden meanings (subtext i mean) to be perceived by the reader, the poem is pretty unconcealed...it however has it's own charm but more subtlety can make it "genuinely" superior...keep writing!
its a lovely poem..........u have talent...........keep it up........a very nicely written poem
glad you guys bothered 2 read dis one as well..!!
n i jst wantd 2 add dt d poem is jst a few lines coming out from me..its interpretation is totally upto you..and as far as d actual meanin is concerned d 1s who can relate 2 it or are just close 2 me would get this better..n sriya i didnt really use "genuine counterfeit" as an oximoron..they arnt antonyms they jst add to d intensity dt i wanted 2 brin out thru dis..thanx for all d appreciation guys..
love all of u
rocking dude !! simply amazing...each n every line of ur poem has so much of depth in it..really luv all ur poems..nd remem 1 thng wenver ull turn back..ull always find us behind u...keep writing gud stuffs..
luv ya loads !!!
u know wat renee...i was going thru ur blog agian babes...and sumtimes it struck me dat u had command over ur poetic license... u knew very well the real meanings of the terms interpreted by laymen but u used them subtley and lyrically in ur context... A sign of mastery!!! keep up the good poetry and i admire ur patience wid crap :)...ppl who think they know u, know renee not even on the surface...so avoid and ignore!!!
"whatever...she makes it like it was such a big deal" ,said He
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